Saturday, May 1, 2010
Query Take Two...
Okay, like I promised, I will be posting my revised query for you all to peruse. Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated! And please, don't worry about hurting my feelings. We all know as writers, that I have none. ;)
Dear Agent X,
I am pleased to submit for your consideration my fantasy, LEGEND OF BLACK ROSE.
Black Rose has come a long way from being an adventurer, father, and husband. Chosen above all others as the Champion of Fizanu, goddess of Justice, his battles have left scars on the lands.
The Dourghuun is a magical conjuring gone awry. It is a demon that entered an Elemental host. Now it is bound to the earth by one deity that created the Elemental and one from a seat in the Underworld. Until it collects five hundred souls, it will remain a plague on the world of Eir du'Brusai.
When Black Rose is sent after the King of Relavia to right an injustice, the King makes a pact with the Dourghuun. The soul of one favored by a goddess would outweigh the many souls of simple mortals. To present Rose's soul to the goddess of the Underworld would return Dourghuun to its rightful place and with special honor.
The outcome of this battle will shift the future of this young world. It will change Black Rose's Fate and leave the world trembling.
Based strictly in a fantasy world of the author's creation, LEGEND OF BLACK ROSE will appeal to readers who enjoy such works as from DRAGONLANCE or FORGOTTEN REALMS and even those who enjoyed THE LORD OF THE RINGS.
LEGEND OF BLACK ROSE is complete at 55,600 words. Thank you for your time and consideration.
M. L. Chesley
Alrighty, there you go!